mjrizon Posted March 26, 2008 Share Posted March 26, 2008 I am writing an essay on the hookah culture and to maybe persuade my audience that not all, in fact only a handful, hookah smokers a drug users/abusers, particularly using their hookah to smoke NHT. I'd like to get some feedback from you guys to see what you think and maybe some suggestions that I should put into the essay. Thanks! happy hookah! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
r1v3th3ad Posted March 27, 2008 Share Posted March 27, 2008 I'll help ya when I get a chance...I just got my paper back on the hookah subculture...28.3 outta 30also, might want to ask jordanneff if he has a spare minute Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mjrizon Posted March 27, 2008 Author Share Posted March 27, 2008 yea that would help me out alot! thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
r1v3th3ad Posted March 27, 2008 Share Posted March 27, 2008 well, at the moment...drunk...do a search for my topic: hookah subcultureI would recommend doing a survey/interview post on the forum, maybe even a poll. That info will really help you, it helped me a lot Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Venzor Posted April 4, 2008 Share Posted April 4, 2008 Nice paper. Hope it reaches far and wide Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
erufiku Posted April 6, 2008 Share Posted April 6, 2008 (edited) Interesting read... Work on the language though, for example the sentence "Compared to shisha, shisha is very sweet even compared to flavored cigars or cigarillos." doesn't really make sense to me. Also, don't know if you're using MLA or not, but when quoting you should include the author's name and the number of the page that you're quoting from. One final word of advice, go easy on the verb 'to be', using it weakens many great papers.Good stuff though, and send us the final copy when you're done editing ps: use 'young adults' instead of youth, otherwise some wiseass will think that the kiddies are spending their lunch breaks at the local shisha bar. Might be true, but the world doesn't have to know ps2: try to include some quotes from published books instead of only citing internet resources. Otherwise it may seem like wikimedia. Edited April 6, 2008 by erufiku Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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